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This week I have selected Claudia’s post from week #49 to review: http://claudiapage-bookie.blogspot.com/2011/04/saturday-centus-sunbeams.html Her entry is included below her link and is titled “Sunbeams”. The words highlighted in blue within my critique are prompts taken from her story and are not included in the 100 word count.
Jillian watched raindrops ramble down the window and felt as gray as the cloud-cluttered sky. Winter had been grueling with heavy snows, Ren’s cut in work hours, and the colicky baby.
Aunt Tillie would have some wit to stamp out the depression she was sure. She was always spouting things like “stitch in time”, “eggs in one basket” and such. Oh yeah, she’d say, “April showers bring May flowers”. Well, Jillian thought, I wish something would bloom in my life.
Then she noticed a purple crocus in the yard, heard laughter coming from the crib, and felt mental sunbeams.
and now….on to my review………
The author has provided us with a glimpse into Jillian’s depressed state. Ren’s cut in work hours signifies a financial stress. The picture she has painted of a long and grueling winter adds to the pent up anxiety one might feel with cabin fever that is exacerbated by the exhaustion of caring for the colicky baby.
The author clearly describes Jillian’s mood and provides the readers with examples of her thought process while trying to overcome her depression. It is then that Jillian has an epiphany when she sees the purple crocus blooming and hears the most wonderful sound of laughter coming from the crib, her mental sunbeams.
The author’s message? Not all is bleak and gloomy.
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