Saturday, March 5, 2011

Saturday Centus #44~ Last One Down And Dirty

Hi everyone. It's time for Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus. Just in case you don't already know, Saturday Centus is a writing meme. The basic rules are that you can use the prompt she provides and UP TO 100 additional words to write a story of your choosing in any style of writing you prefer. This week's prompt is "Everything depended upon this single card" and is in bold. It must be kept intact within the story. So why don't you stop by Jenny's blog (off on my tangent) and check out other stories created using this prompt by clicking here: 

now on to my contribution....


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"But I’m only thirteen!" shouted Mary Jane.

"You’ve gotta go! She’ll lose that tax money and we’ll lose the farm!" cried Sarah Lee.

Mary Jane jumped in the truck. She could barely see over the steering wheel and bounced with every bump in the road. She saw the blinking red neon arrow "Liquor Up Front Poker In The Rear" and pulled into the lot.

The room was dark. She heard the dealer say "Last one down and dirty." Once her eyes had adjusted, she saw granny clutching her cards to her bosom. She prayed and held her breath. She knew everything depended upon this single card.



~Ames

14 comments:

Judie said...

OMG! AMES! This is terrific! What a great take on the prompt!!!!!

Deborah said...

Ooh fingers crossed!! a great little story! :o)

Sue said...

I'm not a gambler, but I find myself holding my breath for granny, too!

Great one, Ames.

=)

Bookie said...

Rural images and desperation...nice job, Ames!

Nonna Beach said...

Great job on this prompt. You crammed a lot of detail into this and painted a real picture...I'm pullin' for Granny to win !!!

Jo said...

I really enjoyed this one Ames ... love the setting ... and sure hope Granny's card pulls through!

~Lissa said...

Ahh Granny betting away the farm. Feels like something my Grandma would do. She sure loves the casino.

Great centus!

Kat said...

Wow! This was really well done! I could just picture those two girls bouncing away in an old pick up, sliding around corners and screaming into the lot. Perfect! Kat

5thsister said...

You would think Granny would know better! Why is it that the kids have more sense than grownups at times?

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Ames, you did it again. This was so much fun. I love that this was about a poker game with granny. I could relate to her barely being able to see over the dashboard too.
xoRobyn

jabblog said...

Ooh, fancy having to check up on your gambling grandma - brave girl!

Poetic Justice said...

Excellent Ames! Can't say enough how you can say so much with so few words. Very well written.

cj Schlottman said...

Ames,

This is a very cool take on this week's prompt. I could see Mary Jane peering over the steering wheel. Very visual and concrete! Good writing.

Namaste..........cj

Jenny said...

I love the visualization you shared here. I am anxious to find a bit of time to read your story. Having the Grands all week for spring break really put my wayyyy behind. But I promise I'll be back soon to enjoy your story tellin'.

This was a great use of the prompt!